Thursday, September 23, 2010
UNKNOWN
Evil thoughts creep into my mind that makes my heart think that it will oose the pain thinking thats it for me today. people hating police chasing teachers yelling parents judging life changing. hurting families with the war. Chaos strikes again breath leaves my body heart stops dead silence drops no movement no life no light only darkness through out the night . where is it can it befound life is so profound sucks and makes no since but still walking in DEAD SILENCE
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I love your writing, it is very profound. However, I have to infer where you would like punctuation. Could you maybe add punctuation or, since it is poetry, work out the structure so that you don't need punctuation. Look at some of the poems that George has written on his blog, Different, to see what I mean.
ReplyDeleteohkay then mrs.benson!
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